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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:16:27 PM   
Purity88


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Status: offline 		I think I may have posted this one in another thread.

Boys

Boys will be boys
What a very true phrase
Yes, boys will be boys
I'm oft quite amazed

They don't mind their messes
They're often quite loud
You'll find them fighting
Because they're quite proud

Half the time sweating
They really like bugs
And spend time collecting
What's oh! just disgusting

They seem never to be ill
If they were
Wouldn't show it
They seem never to cry
If they do
They must hide it

They're always boasting
Of broken bones
And flexing muscles
By picking up stones

The minute the drop one
Upon their big toe
They're babies to boot
And awfully slow

They refuse to take baths
Without a great fight
They'd rather be dirty
They'd rather be right

Boys will be boys
They're made that way
It's built in their system
That's easy to say
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:31:45 PM   
Konstantinos


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Status: offline 		lol sounds like a normal 12 year old to me. lol, you know Kayla, the kind that crack us up. indeed a not at all endangered species.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:36:01 PM   
Purity88


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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:39:21 PM   
Konstantinos


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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:41:16 PM   
notsuccinct


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Status: offline 		I like your boys poem Kayla. and I can rarely think of titles for anything that I think are apt. I usually just have to pick something that kinda goes. haha.

here's one more...

I'm sick of highschool love.
meaningful glances
soft touches
couriers sent
to deliver messages
which we are too shy to give
secret late-night phone calls.
it all culminates
in a broken heart or two.
sometimes three.
for the sake
of a few kisses
sappy notes
inexpensive dates
escort to a dance
sometimes sex.
please spare me.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:41:22 PM   
Purity88


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Status: offline 		Boyish boys grow up to be manly men. Generally speaking.
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:46:55 PM   
Konstantinos


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quote:

Boyish boys grow up to be manly men.


you mean they are not gay? I couldn't translate it otherwise. its a very well coded message.

quote:

here's one more...

I'm sick of highschool love.
meaningful glances
soft touches
couriers sent
to deliver messages
which we are too shy to give
secret late-night phone calls.
it all culminates
in a broken heart or two.
sometimes three.
for the sake
of a few kisses
sappy notes
inexpensive dates
escort to a dance
sometimes sex.
please spare me.

________________


LOL LOL DITTO DITTO DITTO DITTO^999 DITTO^infinity
I'm "sick" of my classmates.
lol

here maybe I'll give it a try:

-hi.
-hello there.
-do you want me to lie to you?
-yes
-ok you are an awesome person, so kind, so funny(pfffttt), so smart(mmmmrrppppffft).
-oh my gosh, I love you. here take a kiss
-oh yay, maybe we can have sex later. which reminds me of just one truth... I find you hawt.
-wow ok lets go have sex, while you keep lying to me and I make you lust. and please lets call it love. oh yes, this has got to be love. I mean just look at how nice we are being to each. omgosh I am in love with you.
-yeah sure sure .oO(who cares? ...)

quite an agreement no?



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I'm a beast.

I'm a HH.

Tiger hug.
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 4:59:37 PM   
RecusantPoet


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Status: offline 		Lydia..Kayla.. LOL ROFL nice work LOL

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 5:27:59 PM   
sar-uh

 

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/5/2005 11:44:55 PM   
gorow9

 

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Status: offline 		lol I like it boys will be boys... lol

Here's a really short one I wrote... it's kinda simple I'm not sure what I think.

Truth and Love

I want to speak the truth in love,
To shout it out to the world
But to do this I am afraid
Why be afraid of truth?

Here's one more

Four season’s rounds

The plant life in spring so beautiful,
Everything opens up and blooms
Why can’t this beauty- so transient stay?

Summer comes ‘round, plants in full bloom
Heat oppressing, but the tree’s shade cools
The life born is spring is living- living now

The sun’s burn dulls, a cool breeze blows
The leaves change, beautiful before returning…
Returning to the earth and fall leaves barren trees

A cold bite returns to the air, plants barren die
But a white blanket covers the ground- a new beauty
And the life prepares for rebirth
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/6/2005 8:06:15 PM   
whisper


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Status: offline 		Gorow- "the sun's burn dulls, ... fall leaves barren trees" I love it. You don't try to be overly descriptive, and it fits very well. You can still picture everything, but it's not laboursome.

And Greenish-- I thnk we should email each other the full anthology of our works , because I love your stuff too! I like the one with the gift of the spiral notebook the best.

One thing I've decided lately is to just stop poems when my idea is finished, regardless of how short and how simple the poem ends up being.

Here's a poem I just wrote, thinking about this weekend (Thanksgiving in Canada):

Oh Be Thankful

The leaves not too long ago were vibrant- falling, blowing around
They lay now silent on the ground, browning and forlorne.
This signifies a time of thanks for the summer and seasons past
And I can thank God for you.
But you are lost- and I've yet to learn
how to give thanks for that.

october 6th, 2005

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/6/2005 9:13:01 PM   
gorow9

 

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Status: offline 		I like it whisper. short and sweet yet a complete idea.

I wrote this poem in second grade and I think it's really good... for second grade lol since we are haveing season poetry

Fall is quickly blowing through,
Bright reds and yellows too,
Orange coming swiftly by
WIndy nights with dark sky

~Sara
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/6/2005 11:36:07 PM   
Psalm_138


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RE: Share what you've written - 10/7/2005 4:11:14 PM   
Christs Apprentice


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Status: offline 		Wow, there are some very talented people in this thread. Well done all. :) I'll go through some of my poems and maybe share one.

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"And ye shall know the truth, and the truth shall make you free." John 8:32

"...Let every one that nameth the name of Christ depart from iniquity." 2 Timothy 2:19e
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/7/2005 4:57:10 PM   
painterchick

 

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manipulation
the family curse
could it be worse
than this sinking sensation
the knowledge that I am a pawn—
in the hands
of a ruthless chess master,
i’m the cause of disaster
i throw up my hands and cry out in anguish
i can see no way out, no way to stop this
and deep inside
i can see the roots growing
the curse i despise has infected me, making me
eerily similar to all that I hate
i lie, i mislead
i manipulate
how did this happen?
i silently ask
why did i stumble
when i promised myself
that i wouldn’t fall prey, that i wouldn’t need help
my questions only echo too loudly
in the halls of my soul
my mind is so cloudy
i’m frozen in fear, for i must not become
everything that i hate—
it’d be their checkmate.



not the best poem in the world, but it reflects something i have been fighting lately.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/7/2005 5:46:12 PM   
notsuccinct


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Status: offline 		this poem reminded me, Alissa-- the poem you posted earlier; words of apology I think it was-- good! really good. not that I didn't like this one.

as you've doubtless noticed by now, I tend to get a little lengthy with the poems. but I'm actually quite pleased with this one... I wrote it this summer. so yeah. I'm posting it. deal. or just don't read it.

it's funny
how you can so long for death
yet at the same time
fear it.
how so much of you screams
that to close your eyes
stop your heart
would be
heaven.
but still that little whisper
saying somehow, real life
would be better.
even though you tell it to shut up
the whisper stays.

it's like truth.

the lie
the lie is bigger
louder, more forceful
daring you to just go ahead
believe something else: you'll be wrong.
but truth is persistent.
there, whispering.
not imposing itself on you
just reminding you
of its continual, patient presence.

the lie is always pushing you
pulling you
trying to stretch you into something
other than what you really are.
while truth stands by
waiting for your acknowledgement.
truth will change you
but only if you let it.
truth will change you into something
better than what you can be on your own
the best and truest you.

truth may be harder
more difficult. standing up
to that big, obnoxious lie
is never easy, but
ultimately
truth is the only thing
that makes anything
good.

when will you believe it?

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/7/2005 10:18:03 PM   
DeltaCosmo

 

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Status: offline 		The long road back

Climbing, running up the hill
striving, striving, trying still
Pressing, nearing, onward I come
then falling, falling backward I dropped
Tumbling, rolling, sliding I fell
gravity tugging, momentum as well
Gradually, slowly I came to a stop
rising and stretching I looked my way up
Towering, rising, frowning in stare
the mighty hill, it did stood there
Clouded, obscured by the midst above
standing, clenching white knuckled fist
Seeing the progress I had indeed missed
back to square on, down to the bottom
Starting again I rose and I followed
the trail so often covered in grime
A slipping, a falling, a passing of time
each arduous step slashed through my being
The shadows of fear were slowly appearing
forgetting, focusing, pressing ahead
Each apprehension will soon fall dead
far I did rise before I fell
But farther, still farther, will I rise now
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/8/2005 12:23:27 AM   
notsuccinct


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quote:

And Greenish-- I thnk we should email each other the full anthology of our works , because I love your stuff too! I like the one with the gift of the spiral notebook the best.


by the way, meant to say... thanks! hehe.

quote:

One thing I've decided lately is to just stop poems when my idea is finished, regardless of how short and how simple the poem ends up being.


man... I need to find a way to shorten the idea. haha. I've been working on that. cutting out the unnecessary stuff. but some of them end up longer than I'd like. I mean... the occasional lengthy poem's no big deal, but who wants the 3 page thing to be a regular occurrance?

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/8/2005 4:10:43 PM   
Christs Apprentice


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Status: offline 		"The Lasting Beauty of Friendship" (c)

A friendship tender and newly sprung
Is but a bud, later a blossom
Which is forever abloom.
Winter's harsh cold,
Summers sun-arounsed heat
Makes not her blossom bitter,
But all the more sweet.
Days wilt not her beauty
So long as the two are equal,
Lest they break.
Two heads upon one stem.
Storms tear not her petals,
Rather they bring more.

As upon her His water he rains,
The Gardner's gentle face
Is a reflection of the Immortal's love
And His everlasting grace.
The rose dies not with aging time,
But due to the Gardner's attentive care,
Is held in the beauty of her lasting prime.

I'm no expert, that's certain.

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"And ye shall know the truth, and the truth shall make you free." John 8:32

"...Let every one that nameth the name of Christ depart from iniquity." 2 Timothy 2:19e
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/8/2005 5:01:31 PM   
whisper


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Status: offline 		Greenish- I like how you ended the poem with the challenge- "when will you believe it?" :) Don't worry about the length of that one. It was persistent, consistent, but not repetitive or redundant. I liked it.

Welcome, Christ's Apprentice! Thanks for sharing your poetry, I quite enjoyed it. Keep it coming!

Painterchick- it's funny, that poem resonated with me, I think, moreso than a lot of poems- simply because I love chess but I'm horrible at it . I start to dread losing, not because I lose, but because I don't want the other smug and arrogant person to win . So avoiding "their checkmate" would be something I was very interested in. Funny how me being bitter made that poem really click with me .

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/8/2005 8:56:40 PM   
RecusantPoet


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A Language called Music


Music is a language
When words cannot describe
Juggle around these twelve notes
To say what you feel inside

Music is a gift
Gi